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She inhaled the bittersweet poison
Of bus exhaust and cologne
Gazing out the dirty back window
Watching all she has ever known
He flipped her hair back softly
Precariously placing it behind her ear
And leaning in for his final performance
He began to make himself clear
Their kisses no longer tasted like cherries
Her lips were no longer his wine
And to put the icing on top of the cake
Her presence was no longer divine
Over time their love became stale
Like a soda that had lost all its pop
All she could do was bow her head slowly
Until his voice came to a complete stop
She turned away from him, tearless
So much for bubblegum love songs
Her toothpick world came crashing down
But where did she ever go wrong?
She relied on her own dependence
With no effort or thought of her own
Just a passenger in someone's back seat
Riding into another unknown
©2006-2009 ~thezimchick
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Author's Comments

So... lots of food metaphors in this one. Maybe I'm hungry or something. I don't really know why I wrote this because the character is really not my personality at all. Actually, she's sort of like the anti-me. But see if you can't pick up all the little correlations between the title and parts of the poem (ok, there's only two or three). I actually love how this one ended up with a recurring theme (and not just the food, either!) Ok, well, it's past my bedtime...

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Reminds me of a poem I wrote called "Sattellite". That one may be coming soon to an art website near you.

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"In the end, we will conserve only what we love, we will love only what we understand, and we will understand only what we are taught."
-Baba Dioum, Senegalese author and conservationist
:iconthezimchick:
ah-ha. i will keep an eye out for it. but for now, i return to my physics homework. i'm only 1/10th of a point away from getting an A...

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//thezimchick

{the truth is out there}
{and so are sheep!}

:alien:
:iconfreedom-in-a-cage:
:(

Damn.

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"In America, through pressure of conformity, there is freedom of choice, but nothing to choose from." - Peter Ustinov
:iconthezimchick:
....?

:hug:

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//thezimchick

{the truth is out there}
{and so are sheep!}

:alien:
:iconfreedom-in-a-cage:
"Their kisses no longer tasted like cherries
Her lips were no longer his wine
And to put the icing on top of the cake
Her presence was no longer divine"

"She turned away from him, tearless
So much for bubblegum love songs
Her toothpick world came crashing down
But where did she ever go wrong?"

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"In America, through pressure of conformity, there is freedom of choice, but nothing to choose from." - Peter Ustinov
:iconthezimchick:
...depressing, isn't it? i don't really know what possessed me to write it though. a sad muse, i guess.

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//thezimchick

{the truth is out there}
{and so are sheep!}

:alien:
:iconfreedom-in-a-cage:
Very depressing. Poetic and wonderful, but very depressing.

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"In America, through pressure of conformity, there is freedom of choice, but nothing to choose from." - Peter Ustinov
:iconthezimchick:
lol, glad you like it :D

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//thezimchick

{the truth is out there}
{and so are sheep!}

:alien:

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